3 comments on “StarFire Dragons Chapter 1 Rewrite #3

  1. Great! I’m hooked!

    He says from who, (near the beginning), but it should be whom. If you can use him instead, it ends in an m. M and m.

      • If that’s all you found, I’m in really good shape! 😀 What did you think of this chapter? Was my writing much better than in the fantasy book you tried to read some time back?

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