2 comments on “The Kavakian Empire – Part One Chapter 1

  1. I liked how silent the Captain was through most of the encounter and it was his officers who made comments and worked around him. Though I was a little surprised that he waited until the Serpent ship was hit to re-issue his command to the Cougar to back off, and that he didn’t actually fire on them when they didn’t completely stand down.

    Excellently done for a piece with minimal editing!

    • Thanks for the feedback. 🙂 I had hoped to imply that they were too far away to fire on the first time around. I will notate this and work on it before it goes to formal publishing.

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