2 comments on “The Kavakian Empire Part One Chapter 8 – Revised

  1. “He didn’t mean to let these people see this weakness in him, but being here with his brother, touching him, feeling the emptiness within him, stressed the stark reality of the situation.” Favorite line of the whole chapter! This was another really good re-write. I like following along with Jori’s thinking and planning, and the suspense for Terk to wake up is building. 😀

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